To bare the body is to reveal stories.
How she owns the light and makes
her skinmaps and close-ups of bones seeable
amongst the shape-shifting shadows, her lower half
outspread like a wishbone.
How her private core hides behind the frail fences
of fingers. How she sophisticates her neck
through a supple twist, the way
a young doe discerns some forest’s nuance, slighting
the far-off hunter, poising her head into a profile,
her hair with strokes of white light,
eloquence of her mouth, nose, eyes.
Then how she uncurls into another
body of work. This time like a cat in her midnight prowl,
slinking towards the moon-lit window.
How she ascends, eyeing
by the shoulder, in transience of breath,
'til the camera glimpses
her most perfect compliance.
-Arian Rey Tejano © 2012 A Noiseless Patient Spider. All rights reserved
Your blog is like a refined Japanese rock garden, becoming simpler and simpler so that the art, your poetry, shines like a diamond stuck in between the white sand.
ReplyDeleteOnce again, you stun me wordless. Such beautiful language, the images--skinmaps, a doe slighting the hunter, wishbone, etc.--and the final, crowning irony. Well done. So very well done.
ReplyDeleteI really like the primary verse.It feels complete.
DeleteIt feels a little 'separate' from the last 2- ask yourself if they are afterthoughts- if not; work to blend them into cinq with top verse. -I don't mean to be critical here- it is only
one impression! thanks for visiting! thanks for sharing-
you had me from this wonderful first line/observation:
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is to reveal stories:
Dear Arian: Exquisite imagery; "slinking into this blackened studio" "she owns the light" and "her most perfect compliance" as the "doe" she is "profile" perfect within the "shape-shifting shadows"; quite brilliant~!
ReplyDeleteas usual, your take is always wonderful! an inspiration for me...
ReplyDeleteHappy valentines Arian!
JJRod'z
ps. thank you for your appreciation on my work... trying my best... :-)
Arian this is a beautiful write! The imagery is amazing!
ReplyDeleteBrilliant take on the prompt, Arian!
ReplyDeleteHank
I liked this.. one enters into the world of the observer. You sustain the imagery very clearly indeed.
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ReplyDeleteGreat way to describe a photograph...
I want to hang the first line around my neck. I want it to be my history. I want to BE this poem.
ReplyDeleteYes...skin maps and stories...I love how you wrap it up at the end with waiting for the camera to capture the perfect image...
ReplyDeleteAriano, this poem is Operatic. So many wonderful lines.
ReplyDeleteA lovely trail of magic.
ReplyDeletetender, lovely... i think i will stay a while, indulge myself, and read it again...
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